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PostSubject: idk what to call it...   Sat Jun 14, 2008 7:52 pm

there's another half of it...i just don't want to post it all...


I cry myself to sleep each night.
So many losses I have went through...
So many pains, so many tears, so many scars within my young heart.
The mind of youth is gone from within me.
The cruelty of life haunts me as everyday passes by.
It's my desire to forgive and forget, but how can I when I have nothing?
My life shattered, my smile torn, my eyes turned steely and my skin pale.
Till my head screams, "NO! NO MORE!!!"
I'm all alone, outside, at night.
Weeping, praying, wishing someway for happiness to return to me.
Tears of blood I shed each night, with one final goodbye I leave.
My heart heavy with wounds, my eyes tired and red, my faith gone like the love everyone else seems to have.
But there every night I sit in the dark and stare at the stars, wishing to take everything back.
I cry, I yell, I scream, I hit, but no one can save me.
Sad and blue I live life.
Everyday is another pain to add upon my shattered heart, every minute is just another heartache.
And with every breath I wish the wish that I was dead.

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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Sat Jun 14, 2008 11:53 pm

to be honest with you it's not quite one of your better ones I don't think... maybe for me it's just because the form is a bit harder to understand.. but i still like it
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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Sun Jun 15, 2008 7:29 pm

yeah i thought that 'the fallen can still fly' was waaaaaaaaay better, but again the whole meaning of this one is different than what i've been writing lately.

what do you mean by the form is hard to read?

and thank you.

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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Sun Jun 15, 2008 8:55 pm

idk... it's kind of a confusing read.. there are like two parts that i had to re-read cuz i din't quite understand them
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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Sun Jun 15, 2008 11:53 pm

what parts?

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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Wed Jun 18, 2008 4:56 pm

It's okay I guess.

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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Thu Jun 19, 2008 1:09 pm

oh gee kevin, thank you

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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Wed Sep 03, 2008 2:59 pm

i like it i dont care what other people say about it i think its really good.
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PostSubject: Re: idk what to call it...   Wed Sep 03, 2008 8:22 pm

thank you muchly =)

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